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Interactions 1 Writing, 4/e
Cheryl Pavlik
Margaret Keenan Segal
Cultures of the World

Editing Practice

Edit and rewrite the following paragraph. Pay particular attention to:

  • time clauses when, while, and as
  • punctuation of time clauses
  • as soon as
  • then
  • using quotations



1

As soon he got up the next morning the prince began to look for Cinderella. He took the glass shoe and he went from house to house. At every house he asked does this shoe fit any girls in your house? While he arrive at Cinderella’s house the stepsisters very excited. They tried on the glass shoe but it not fit. When one of the sisters was trying to put on the shoe, the Prince was seeing Cinderella. He told her to put on the shoe.








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