Editing Practice

Edit and rewrite the following paragraph. Pay particular attention to:

• adjectives
• appositives
• historical present tense

1		One of my favorite movies is Cast Away. Tom Hanks, a hardworking but efficient businessman was on an airplane that crashed into the ocean. He is the only survivor. He gets to a very, lonely, tiny island. He was the only person on the island. However, he is very independent cheerful. He made many things for himself. He even learns to make fire. In the end, he made a raft and sails back. He returns to his old job but he is a different person.