Editing Practice

Edit and rewrite the following paragraph. Pay particular attention to:

• logical argument
• transition words: first of all, second, finally
• linking expressions: also, at the same time, besides, furthermore, similarly
• connecting words: although, nevertheless, as a result, since
• conditional
• verb forms
• verbal adjectives
• spelling
• punctuation

1		Students should not receive grades for attendance. At the present time, students at our school can fail a course but they pass all the tests if they would not attend class. I think that this is unfair. Students, who can learn the information, on their own should not have go to class. There are several reasons for this. First of all, learning the information is the purpose of the class, why do teachers care about how students learned it? Second, really bored teachers not doing their jobs well. Therefore, make students attend bored classes reward teachers for doing a bad job. If teachers will want students in their classes, they will make the classes interesting. Perhaps the school should fire teachers that have bad attendance because this shows that they aren't good teachers. In addition, students who do not want to be their do not add anything to a class. Nevertheless, they may actually cause problems for the teacher and the other students. Similarly, give students permission not to go to class will make the classes smaller. The students who there will be really interesting in learning. Consequently, the classes are better.