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Revising and Editing

Edit and rewrite the following paragraph. Look for problems in the following:

  • giving reasons with because, so, therefore
  • using transition words: in addition, also, first of all, finally
  • avoiding overgeneralizations
  • using correct paragraph format
  • using present tense correctly
  • using pronouns correctly


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All university students should have jobs. there are several reasons. first of all students go to parties all the time. they never go to class also. A job teach responsibility. They help people to grow up. they in addition teach the value of money. Students have to work hard for their money therefore they won't spend them on stupid things. Students should have jobs finally because they can pay for his education.








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